I can see where you're coming from... it's no complicated composition with a typical structure.
I guess maybe you'll like the second song (not yet recorded) better then, it will be longer and structured quite differently. Thanks for your feedback so far ^^

Oh, and I was inspired by Edgar Allan Poe's "The Raven"... there's a part that goes like

Tell this soul with sorrow laden if, within the distant Aidenn
It shall clasp a sainted maiden whom the angels named Lenore
Clasp a rare and radiant maiden whom the angels named Lenore
Quoth the Raven, "Nevermore."