What you have written are some more or less ordered thoughts. That's nothing to do with a design document. A design document is a detailed description of the game mechanics, locations and quests. You mentioned some locations but thats all. "There are mini games" is too less for a game mechanics description. Overall the document is much too abstract and looks more like an advertising brochure than a specification.


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