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Pizza-Empire(Intro)
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05/30/07 17:46
05/30/07 17:46
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Hey there guys I´m now ready to take on a more komplex game I think I hope that I will get this game finished it shouldn´t be too big but bigger than the other ones.  If I can´t continue I´ll be sure to ask you guys so for now this is my Intro scene(maybe I´ll ad a car). I know the storyline isnt too good but I´ll give it a try. What do you think of this scene? does it have the right ambiente? let me know what you think C&C welcomed so here a preview pic(but video is recommented) you can download the trailer too or watch it on youtube  Im also here to present my new Homepage but I hope to find a better Homepage creator  [url=http://rapidshare.com/files/34283961/pizza-empire.wmv.html]High-Res Video download-Link[/url] or watch it here at Youtube Best Regards Aztec 
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Re: Pizza-Empire(Intro)
[Re: aztec]
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05/30/07 18:01
05/30/07 18:01
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Poor or Standart Textures - CHECK Bad Fonts - CHECK Bad Text-Formatting - CHECK Weird grey bars - CHECK Try to improve that. Use better textures - They do A LOT, Also shadows help much, just a simple light spot looks ugly. The light-pole also looks very weird- i doubth that that tiny pole can hold that big thing up there  The fonts looks ugly, use a TT-Font instead, something that always comes with Windows - Verdana for instance. Make the text smaller and let it appear in the center and well formatted. Make it look like a page from a book for example. Looking at the grammar couldn't hurt much as well  The Grey bars are also something very very weird. If you want, i can make you a small example how i mean that later  Greetings Mike
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Re: Pizza-Empire(Intro)
[Re: Michael_Schwarz]
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05/30/07 18:17
05/30/07 18:17
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Hm... if you're not, like ISG says, planning on adding a scene around it, at least put a street in there with a few cars driving by, the rest can dissapear in the dark I guess. And then give the pub itself more detail. A rubbish bin infront of it, a brick that's fallen out etc. I'd scroll the text or something. I know it's not that much text, but it's usually easier to read if the text scrolls through. the reader will be more motivated... too much text at once is entmutigend^^ the rest is nice, especially the cam movement. And the game idea's great! 
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Re: Pizza-Empire(Intro)
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05/30/07 18:28
05/30/07 18:28
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Wow thanks to that many answers so quickly first I hav eto excuse my grammar probs because english is not my native speach and Im still in school learning it(though i have an A in school) I´ve planed to maybe add rain or snow that trash-can is a nice Idea and about what Michael said its just a opening scene you will never see that house again during the game its just to know where youre working  and also thanks for that story would you be angry if I just copied it? I´ll aslo make sure to get some Cars and a Road. I tried to make the gray bars to get something like a FILM effect if you know what I mean Thx guys for your true answers and I´ll just go and work on what you just said Regards Aztec  EDIT: about the Shadow  I´M SORRY BUT IM STILL USING THE a6 extra now shadows here unfortunatly  Oh and maybe someone could read the text for me because german-english would sound bad I think I would appriciate that also 
Last edited by aztec; 05/30/07 18:31.
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Re: Pizza-Empire(Intro)
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05/30/07 20:07
05/30/07 20:07
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little Update here look. The light is not so bright People are walking its raining and car drive  I also added a trash can this was the update for today kepp C&C comming  Regards Aztec PS: text is still the same but new font/position 
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Re: Pizza-Empire(Intro)
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05/30/07 20:16
05/30/07 20:16
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Okay Tank you so much for these tips I allways fell honored if a Mod replies in my thread but these tips are great  so thiner black bars and tighter city atmosphere I understand Regards  Aztec
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