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This is the Indigogo page for my game FEOCDER



Feocder is an horror-adventure game with puzzle and action elements.

You are Karl, a lonely man who lost his will for living. He feels strangled by the boredom of every day life, frustrated by the seemingly meaningless existence of life itself. But soon that will change, when he is forced on a journey, covered with agony and darkness.
His guide will be the Feocder which will lead him to the meaning of life and the power to even surpass God itself...


Correct, there will no panels, regenerating health, sudden highlighting, arrows etc... Only your mind will do, or not
You have to actually read the notes, books and hints laying around, solve riddles etc...
You can`t just walk up to a monster and shoot it in the face... well you can always try

There are poetic aspects in the game, about the meaning of life, which will help you in the game, if you understand it and interpretat it correctly.
Example:

There will be golden, butterflies (manifestation of an idea) flying around the level sometimes. Some are golden others tainted more or less dark.
If monster (manifestation of evil emotions) are near a butterfly, the butterfly will be corrupted by the monster (evil emotion) and turn into a dark color.
That means, you can determann(maby) if the location is dangerous or not, by watching the butterflies (if there are any).

I will keep you updated!

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tbh.: 12k€ seems to be quite a lot ( not saying that it's not possible but it would be a shame if the funding fails :S )

Anyway, I wish you the best luck with your game, looks promising

EDIT: just found out that you don't have to reach the 12k goal to get the funded money

I don't know... First of all, how do you even pronounce Feocder?

Secondly, the idea sounds like a pipe dream. Free world games where the user has influence on everything are rare and limited for a reason, it's an insane amount of debugging and fine tuning that has to go into that. Like, I seriously can't imagine a small team to pull it off in the way you describe it on the IndieGogo page.

And the perks are... Apart from the fact that they are not appealing to me, do you really want user content in your game? Like... You ought to put some restrictions in there and do some rigorous filtering.

And last but not least, the english is terrible and two screenshots with no video? I'm sorry if I'm all negative, but I really don't see this going anywhere as it stands right now.

It think it could turn into something really fun. Some constructive criticism:

* The perks are a decent start I think, but should be made more appealing to backers.
* Probably change the name too, at least for me it doesn't bring up any horror elements/aspects.
* The pink font is out of place, perhaps something more bloody?

Ok.
I can`t change the perks anymore...
Otherwise, video is coming, I had some issues, so I couldn`t upload it yet.
There will be more content during the process, no worries ^^

what if 10 people donate 4000 Euros? wouldn't you be giving all your profit away?

Sounds like a fun project but I agree with JustSid. Thats LOTS of debugging - and if 10 people donate 4000 Euros all that debugging and years of work for publicity only doesnt seem worth it...

Also you never mentioned how to pronounce Feocder

is it Feo-Coder?
Feo-CD-er


At any rate Good luck

EDit: I see there is only an option for one of those.. my mistake

I limited the 4000 Euros donation to 1 person only.
I changed the panels.
Feocder is meant to be a secret, nobody is supose to know what it means
Video(self made music and sounds) will be finished in about 3-4 days.
More content is on the way(pictures, video introduction).
Demo is maby on the way. Not sure about that one.

And it is Feoc-der. "c=s"

More critic please (what you like and what you don`t like).

The information you put on your Indiegogo page is way too sparse to be asking for €12,000 and your tone isn't very professional either. Like: "We will never, ever emulate the route of main stream video games, made for crowds of sheep, who have lost their ability to think." Wake up, sheeple! Amirite?

But all criticism aside, my german is only about as strong as your english, and considering how much help I've received lately for that I think it's only fair that I would point out some things you should make note of if you want to improve your english.

In proper english you would use a colon, not a comma, and most of the words following the name would be capitalized (as I assume they are part of the title):
For a subtitle it's pretty lame, but at least now it's correct.



In english you use "an" only with words that start with a vowel. "An apple." "An eagle." "An octopus." Everything else uses "a". "A horror." "A game." "A fight." So:




First of all, you should use "to live" rather than "for living". Secondly, in english you wouldn't use imperfect tense unless you want to be specific about the time he lost the will to live. So saying it the way you have is awkward because it begs the question "when". This is better:




Again, you really shouldn't say things like this when you're trying to get random strangers to give you money, but as long as I'm fixing all of your other grammar problems I have to say you are going a bit overboard on the commas here. This is fine comma usage if you're writing in German but in English it is not okay, it breaks up the flow of your sentence considerably and makes you sound like a German who's trying and failing at english.

This is much better (grammatically):
Note the lack of commas between "sheep" and "who". In english, separating a relative clause from the rest of the sentence with a comma is rarely necessary and if you overdo it like this, it really stands out.

Ok I changed the grammar.