It's awkward because the flow of the sentence is changing within the sentence. Not the pacing, but how you approach the topic (I'm sure there is a grammatical term for this, but fuck that, ain't nobody got time for that)

Here is how I would write them (disclaimer: Just because it's my native language and my father teaches German in high school doesn't mean I'm good at it)





Honestly, more context would've been nice. But yeah, maybe you can salvage this in some way